Fic: I Am Trying to Make You Sing (PG, JA/JP)

[unamaga]

I Am Trying to Make You Sing
Jensen/Jared, PG; 564 words of pure schmoop; for lyric_ficathon

Lazy yellow moon coming up tonight, shining through the trees.
Crickets are singing and lightening bugs are floating on the breeze.

It’s three minutes past midnight when Jared rolls over onto his side in the high grass and kisses Jensen, right on the mouth. Jensen doesn’t even startle, just slips his hands up Jared’s back and into his long hair, twisting a little so Jared will tip his head down—yeah, just like that.

“Do you think it was meant to be like this?” Jensen asks when he’s caught his breath. Jared flops back on the ground next to him and his side is warm against Jensen’s arm, a barrier against the night’s chill.

“Like what?” Jared eventually mumbles, lazy and slow.

“Us,” Jensen says. He brushes his thumb over the inside of Jared’s open palm, tracing the curves and spidery lines. “Meeting like we did.”

Jared turns his head, bangs falling over his eyes, and gives Jensen a very long look. For a minute, Jensen can hear the crickets all around them, chirping to each other from the underbrush in a secret song that he can almost understand the words to.

A lightning bug drifts leisurely by.

“What are you thinkin’ about, Jen?” Jared asks, reaching up with his free hand and pressing gentle fingers to Jensen’s jaw. Jensen sighs, quiet and sweet like a breeze through the cattails.

“Nothing,” he says finally and turns to kiss Jared’s fingers. “It’s not important.”

Jared sends him another inscrutable look, squeezing their hands together. “It is important if it’s bothering you,” he says. “Tell me.”

“It’s…” Jensen pauses, trying to gather his thoughts. Those same fingers flutter inquisitively over his brow and he has a sudden moment of deja vu. “Do you ever get the feeling we’ve done this before?”

“What? We’ve never been to this part of Texas—”

“No,” Jensen interrupts. He fidgets and then sits up, letting go of Jared’s hand to link his own together above his knees. “I mean this,” he says. “Sometimes, I can finish your sentences before you even start them. And you’ve said yourself that you can tell when I come into a room.”

Jared looks at him solemnly, his fox-sharp eyes narrow and serious, and says, “It’s because your soul cries out to me like a foghorn—Jaaareeed.”

“Why you little,” Jensen growls, and then he’s wrestling with Jared, elbowing him hard in the side until he can get him into a headlock, arms pinned between their torsos. “I knew I shouldn’t have bought you that Friends DVD set.”

Jared’s shaking, laughing loud and honest, even though Jensen keeps crushing pressure against his windpipe. “Come on, you were asking for it!”

“See if I ever try to have a serious conversation with you again,” Jensen snorts, letting go and falling back onto the grass. “You are such an ass.”

Suddenly, Jared’s leaning over him, a dark shadow against the moon’s light. For a moment, he looks like he has a halo. Then, he shifts closer and Jensen can see his eyes, wide and amused. “Aw, come on,” he says again. “You don’t really believe that stuff, do you, Jen?”

Jensen shifts, annoyed.

“Man, it’s a bunch of bull. Just because we click doesn’t mean there’s anything weird about it,” Jared says. He leans in and kisses Jensen, lips soft and coaxing. “I just know you. Ok?”

He breathes out against Jensen’s ear, and Jensen shivers. “Yeah,” he says, reaching up to grip Jared’s sides. “Yeah, you’re right.”

Comments

[ilovesn.livejournal.com]

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW

I LOVED IT

SO SWEET AND OMG! PAST LIFE JENSEN AND JARED.

IS THERE GOING TO BE MORE TO THIS?

I HOPE SO. THAT WOULD BE A GREAT STORY.

HOW THEY MEET IN A PAST LIFE.

WOW!

*HUGGS*

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

Thanks, honey!! ♥

I don't really know if there's something more to this. I feel like I might ruin it if I jump in to do a sequel or make it a 'verse. We'll see, though.

ANYWAY. Glad you liked it! :D

[talilov.livejournal.com]

That was so sweet and well written. I love how the beginning just jumps right in and how you balance the schmoop with the comedy so no one feels the need to throw up.

You create some beautiful imagery with your descriptions, like with this: his side is warm against Jensen’s arm, a barrier against the night’s chill. I actually felt that warmness.

I love how Jen is all timid and emotive and Jared is all concerned, and then he just has to make fun of him. I love the comedy of Jared's response and it's such a contrast to how I would have imagined it. Jensen being all serious and swooning and in love and Jared being a manly man. Haha. I love hoe thoguhtful Jensen is, and in contrast, how Jared just accepts things for what they are. Both different approaches, but both different and meaningful for them.

I love the ending and this was a great little piece. Awwww.

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

Why do your reviews always leave me a pile of flailing Mel? Oh, that's right. Because they're AWESOME.


I love how Jen is all timid and emotive and Jared is all concerned, and then he just has to make fun of him.

YES. Because, can you actually see the two of them being serious for such a long period of time? And how could Jared willfully let an opening like that go? Not possible.


*makes out with you*

[pushingyouaway.livejournal.com]

SQUEEEEEEEE

yay for shmoop! oh so adorable througout babe

yay for lyric-fic!

Jared looks at him solemnly, his fox-sharp eyes narrow and serious, and says, “It’s because your soul cries out to me like a foghorn—Jaaareeed.”
*giggle* oh jayred

*gives you cookies and kisses*

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

*smooches!*

Bwahah, Jared can't be serious for longer than five minutes. His brain starts to make funny noises, like "ppft" and "furgle" and then, sometimes? His ears smoke.

The doctors say it's incurable, but Jared doesn't seem too phased.

[dea-liberty.livejournal.com]

Aww! The boys are just so...precious.

GAH! Wanna just...watch them cuddle amongst other things all day.

Although...

Does Jen know something we don't? *blinks innocently*

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

He knows that they are soulmates, joined by the sacred bond of love and buttsecks. He knows that such a sacred bond cannot be shattered even by time!

I don't know what you're talking about.

[alchemyonfire.livejournal.com]

Schmoop is ♥. And so is this.

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

I'm glad you think so. :D

[dev-earl.livejournal.com]

Jared looks at him solemnly, his fox-sharp eyes narrow and serious, and says, “It’s because your soul cries out to me like a foghorn—Jaaareeed.”

god, i love Friends. :D

thanks for making jensen this cute/shy/adorable because in my head he is this amazingly humble sweetcakes but i keep reading him being all cocky and bold, it's ruining the image in my slightly perverted head. XD

this is nice. ;)

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

*hugs*! I know what you mean. Jensen doesn't seem the type to go around being an ass, but people are always painting him that way. I mean, have they heard him giggle over one of Jared's stupid jokes? Total doll. ♥

M'glad you liked it, though, hun!

[zenamydog.livejournal.com]

hmmm really sweet, really nice. I enjoyed it! Thank you!

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

*smish* Thank you, hon. :D

[alistra.livejournal.com]

Awwww. That is so sweet. :D Thank you for sharing!

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

And thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked it. ♥

[inderpal.livejournal.com]

Eeeehhh! So much love!!
I love how you created this lazy, laid back and comfortable athmosphere, like a nice and warm summer evening/night and nothing but the sky above them. *sighs*
And then of course Jared has to crack a joke (which had me snorting water up my nose) and keeps the schmoop from being to schmoopy.
You rock so much and win at life or something. So much ♥ !!

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

YES. I MADE YOU SNORT WATER UP YOUR NOSE!! \o/

[dawnie1970.livejournal.com]

Wow. That was incredible.

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

Aww, thanks! I'm glad you think so. *smish*

[castiel.livejournal.com]

OH MY GOD. This is so cute and sweet, and oh God, I love schmoop. I'm really ridiculously in love with your Jensen, because I love seeing him as the sweet, shy, adorable cutie that I like to think of him as in my head, and I so rarely see him written that way in fic. So thanks bunches! I'd totally love to see a sequel dealing with past lives, but no pressure or anything considering this is just lovely as a stand alone. ♥

[unamaga.livejournal.com]

Dude, eljay sucks for not telling me about this comment.

Thanks, sweetie! I know what you mean about Jensen. Everyone sort of has him being this total asswipe, or really controlled and calculated. But, come on, dudes, have you seen the outtakes or A Day In the Life? Jensen is a totally dork-faced boy, especially when it comes to Jared. :D

[dullemarulle.livejournal.com]

The sweetness of this made my morning. I loved how comfortable they were with each other and how well they knew each other ♥

[writing-light.livejournal.com]

I love shmoopy boys! This was so sweet. *draws hearts around you and Jensen*

[walkawayslowly.livejournal.com]

That is the cutest, schmoopiest thing I've ever read and I LOVE IT. It's just dripping with adoreableness all over it and YES, there should absolutely be more. :D

(Also, HI! I like reading things late.) :p